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She enters the room
Eyes meet
Tower of dignity crumbles
And a lovesick puppy emerges

Surrender to seduction
Relinquish control
Lust takes center stage
And common sense submerges

Blinding sensations
Pleasure and pain
Lust for a moment
Then tears of disdain

Clouded confusion
A swift end
One minute in ecstacy
Then off with his head


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The following comments are for "Praying Mantis"
by dentt

hey hey this is awesome I lovve it...It's sick and kinda weird butit all makes sense in the end...wiked job man Peace

( Posted by: twistymisty [Member] On: February 24, 2006 )

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