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a/n: this is experimental. it is supposed to hang...i think. feedback?

i could not be home
on other nights
when career's
famed clasps
on me.

i tire.
i dream.

and watch tv.
but it is not true
that I love you
on Fridays only.

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The following comments are for "I love you on Fridays only"
by webguy

I liked this. Sounded almost like a Haiku. It summed up many things that we deal with in the modern world, and you didn't even have to say much. Well done.

( Posted by: malthis [Member] On: September 11, 2002 )

nicely done
Sometimes saying something with fewer words is harder than if you were to write several verses. Just choosing the right words can be challenging.

I liked this piece. It was brief and to the point.


( Posted by: appleblossom [Member] On: September 11, 2002 )

the merits of brevity
Good show. A brief yet well drawn piece on the difficulties of relationship vs career in the modern world. And proof that sometimes less is more.

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: September 12, 2002 )

WOW- i've heard that before - nice piece!

( Posted by: poesandpoetry [Member] On: February 4, 2004 )

friday nights
well fridays dont come soon enough, when your tired of the bussel, you have some really heart felt work here,,,Bless U,,and keep writing so we can keep mending our hearts.

( Posted by: coco [Member] On: April 25, 2004 )

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