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I see my rival in bitter disguises.
He lingers like the taste of broken glass
on a lifeless morning after.

He is reflected in cold hostile stares
on grisly subways and the shining grey
of coffee cups on empty stalls.

I stand unprepared.
He grins from every crevice.

And I know this of rivals and of death,
they are intransigent as old love
and survive a brief forever.

As blank as air, cold as my desperation,
colourless as evil, he is untouchable,
unknown, a familiar stranger.

He waits in the splinters of electric night,
at yawning doors. I watch him in slithering
crowds, in a diaspora of eyes.

He knows my secrets.
He does not mean well.

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The following comments are for "Janus"
by eliot

eliot/ of "Janus"
Imagery galore..Cool wordplay...

Enjoyed read,

"Confusion to our enemies." - Sicilian toast

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 20, 2006 )

The poem is deliberately ambiguous.
It is for the reader to decide who exactly "my rival" is.
I will only point out that "Janus" was the Roman god of the winter solstice, often found on doorways and usually portrayed as two faced.

( Posted by: eliot [Member] On: February 24, 2006 )

Janus and ability to look past and future
Janus had a look to the future, and an eye on the past. Your words ring with meloncholy, but to my mind, naming this "Janus" implies to me the future hope of the Janus who looks forward. You could have chosen a 'dead' god, but instead chose a dubious, but forward thinking one! I enjoyed the read.
And on another level, are we not really our own worst enemies? Smart and enlightening!
again, thanks for the read!


( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: February 24, 2006 )

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