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DUFFELL BAG



As if you were asked
to describe
which birds were chirping?

As if your voice was about to get lost.

Wandering about in your rags.






(one for John L.)


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The following comments are for "DUFFEL BAG"
by gomarsoap

duffel bag
I don't know exactly what is going on but I get a lonely sense- I read several times and for me, was reminded of seeing homeless people wandering the streets of D.C. and Bridgeport, two cities I was very familiar with. Saw Vets with duffel bags, and others "lost" on the streets. Am I even close here?
The images are gripping.

nice to read you-
Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: February 20, 2006 )

lonely shoe
Well, well. I was attracted to this poem because I have hit a "wandering stage" and the personal feeling I get when I read the word "duffle bag" is traveling.

However, this is not the feeling I have after reading the poem.

I am just left here thinking about seeing the one shoe on the side of the highway without another shoe.

Anyways, I liked it. :) I don't exactly know if the first few lines really fit with the rest of it, but maybe it does in some subconcious way that I'm not seeing.

Amanda

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: February 20, 2006 )

rags
Riches are funny things. The Son of Man may have no place to rest his head, but there are many who are glad they know him.

As many of us are glad we know you.

You're in no danger of losing your voice, Bob. There is One who hears it always, and many of us who are glad to hear it at all.

When there's no one else to catch you, guess Who does.


john

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: March 19, 2006 )





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