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Sicily

Old Palermo

Throughway

In their way

Porta Nuova

Attached

From footprint

Right on left path

Steps to

Within view

Out sight-enhanced

New gate



021406



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below the subliminal
deep within manipulation
that's where tr^th resides

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The following comments are for "New Gate"
by Bobby7L

chapter1 says 3/4/2 x 4 = 7
As always, your leaving clue of visit is appreciated.

Perhaps, would be better for reader broken into four, 3/4/2's? I formed, as presented, to blur breaks and wished it to be read as mystery.- Then, as puzzle, to be put together.

Vendetta in progress, attachment to past and wordplay/language levels, combined, may be too much?

I know it's not derivative. It surely has unique perspective. Appears original. May not be popular style, but it's mine.

"Confusion to our enemies." -Sicilian toast...

Ciao,
7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 16, 2006 )

New Gate
Bobby, seems like home again when you are here! Enjoyed stopping by to read you. Life just keeps going.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 16, 2006 )

windchime/nae411- Of fate, devised
Lucie- Am glad you were able to glean references, within this compressed (senryupsyched) story. That two entities, by fate, as well as "attachment" to "way" of life, arrive by seperate pathes to point ("Gate/Porta"), is more than ironic. It's karmic.

Before transcending mundane material world, there must be resolution of these 'modes' of 'being.' Aim through 'sight,' is not as enhanced awareness.

Vendettas, like cylce/age collective 'we' find ourselves entangled in (war/conflict), resolve nothing. "Old Palermo" represents current way of thinking/acting. We require a collective "Porta Nouva" way of thinking, to change that. Or we can continue to kill each other.

Thanks again,
Robert William

Renae- Good to hear your voice. And see. (Pleasing avatar)...Thanks

Ciao,
RW

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 16, 2006 )

JEANNIE45/ Of gates and paths
Jeannie- Glad you stopped by. Extravagant # noted.

Many takes, regarding age of quarrel and hypocrisy we find ourselves in, have been represented here in recent days. "P.C. (Onward, Christian Soldiers)," along with, "New gate," are my observations on subject.

I do believe a person, once transcending mode of goodness, attaining/living in mode of godliness, would not engage in war. Not sure whether either dogmatic driven 'side,' entangled in current conflict, concerns themselves with matters of consciousness raising. Aim of raising, then engaging armies under flags, remains collective mode of choice on this little planet.

Transcendent paths and gates back home are here. Whether we seek, find, then traverse them, is other matter...

That's my humble opinion.

Respectfully,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 17, 2006 )

Humble you are,
as I've so often found you to be in your submissions. Sometimes jovial, youthful, wise, gentile, remarkably kind, this is just one of your many poems I've read that I enjoy because of the abstract within abstract, mind's fractions yet full of wonder.

Utterly profound my friend.

Darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: February 17, 2006 )

Dareva/ Of Convolutions
Darlene- We am what we am. In own eyes, am no prize. Fighting my demons is no day at beach. I admit to being jaded, cynical, evasive, manipulative, cryptic, ghost of own making.

Hopefully, shared experience here, among hearts less cold, is tonic. I believe it is.

Your kind words are greatly appreciated.

For this wondrous place, thankful,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 17, 2006 )

In sight enhanced
Earlier today, at the MFA, wondered what to make of Miro... now, at my computer screen, wonder what to make of B7L. Have decided to make Miros of your poems and stripped-down poems of the surrealists' paintings. (In my own little world of madly pretentious synesthesia, this seems to work remarkably well...)

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: February 17, 2006 )

M-Soul/Of Art, An Assassin & Abstractions
Caitlin- Your comment made me smile.

Think it may have hatched with haiku-formed (senryu-post), "Disoriented," soon after arriving here. Having always been fan of compression, senryupsyched stories seemed natural progression.

Lyric remains favorite form.

"New Gate" is convoluted journey, I know, but hopefully a level or two gets through.

Recall poem, penned at college: "We're All Nixon's"...May have to search vault for that one..

Thanks for scoping,
7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 17, 2006 )

FelineWhip?/ Of Enlightenment and ...
..transient illusion.."

Ms M-
Cool to find 'you' here..Computer went sideways when tried to send reply..Perhaps, conflicted by its brilliance..(Laughing)..

Second attempt:

Yes, things which we perceive as real..ipods, personas.."illusions" (in Buddhist theory), not as "enlightenment," although, "that which is."...For we are one with, not exisiting separate, of that which is...in "illusion of time."...."between transient illusion of past and future.."...

Will look for new representation..

Keep blowing sand downwind..

Transcending on, here attached, not by gravity alone,
7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: August 15, 2006 )

Feline Whip/ Correction
"?"-mark is typo in above title..

Bibbing in Babylon,
Bobby7L


( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: August 15, 2006 )

New Gate
Bobby - sorry, but I just don't get this one. Not even after reading the comments. Way too cryptic and esoteric for my brain.

I kind of liked the line, "Right on left path," but not sure why.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: August 16, 2006 )

g-soap/Senryupsyched
Bob-
Perhaps, if read as 3/4/2 x 4, as penned, transliteration would be less necessary..

Threat to old way of thinking is about to be dispatched/clipped. Old ways are not answer. Vendettas..

At some point, entities with higher level of consciousness will transcend prevailing era (Age of Kali...quarrel and hypocrisy)...This shared little planet may then proceed forward, in karmic sense..

Old way of perceiving, not being as awareness/enlightenment..

Regarding line you like: Transcending is not simple/easy. Karmic progress is made in/by steps..

On other level, is just another 'hit.'

Transcending mundane material madness in progress,
7L


( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: August 16, 2006 )

hello

HI BOBBY-

^^^^^^^^^^^^
^^^^^^^^^^^^

morse code

macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: August 16, 2006 )

Ego--does not exist--Bobby7--New Gate
Hmmm? Interesting.

What I know of Buddhism is that ego is an illusion. Those who hang on to the concept of a separate self are living in illusion. All are connected. All are part of the whole. There is no you. There is no me. There is no they. There is ONE. That is the very basics of the teachings. There is no finger fucking pointing blame or egos filled with sense of superiority and judgement over those they have deemed lesser evolved on the karmic consciousnessness scale. There is tolerance and their is love and their is joy whenever possible. The Buddha loved to laugh, and he laughed often, as do most of the so-called higher evolved ones. To take all of this shit too seriously is a sign of attachment to the illusion of physicality and once again, the "sense of self/ego". Smile Bobby7L. Life is good. Life is what we choose to perceive.

( Posted by: Legs [Member] On: August 16, 2006 )

...
and unfortunately for me and most of us, it is almost impossible to keep all of these higher concepts in mind in our day to day living inside these grotesque human skins with all the constant gibberish of our ego centered human minds. [correction on all the "theirs" meant to write "there"--it happens. Who cares. What does it matter in the end we all die and are born again to learn new grammer. Fuck it. ;-]

( Posted by: Legs [Member] On: August 16, 2006 )

macbeth/ Legs
Laura- Greetings back...

Wendy- Since everything is but apparition/ Perfect in being what it is/ Having nothing to do with good or bad/ Acceptance or rejection/ One may well burst out in laughter. -14th century Tibetan Buddhist, Longchenpa ..A personal fave..

In poem: "New Gate", someone is about to get clipped...That's it. Rest is manipulation of words.

Much thanks for taking time here,
RW

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: August 16, 2006 )

Two characters in conflict with self
A.N.- In this piece, a pair of characters created and represented here at Lit, are in conflict.

There is character we'll call BobbyG. Character found in: "Before Christmas", "Holiday In Sicily (2005)" and "Sicilian Karmic Infinity." ("SKI" is about BobbyG, but represented, utilizing senryupsychedpoet's pen.)

Second character would be senryupsychedpoet, who has transcended age of kali, seeing folly in vendetta. His observations, in real time, give hint to inner conflict.

Reportingfromfield, a third character, could be telling story, as told to him by senryupsychedpoet...

Lunaticatlarge,



( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: September 8, 2006 )





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