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There is no I today;
Asking if [you] want [me]
I lose myself to [you]

This action without form
Leaves some[thing] lacking
[You] press against me
Like [he] did
(Substitutions are easy
when happenings are
violently torn from memory
and replaced with something
less characteristic of [you] and [me])

The way [you] look at [me]
Makes [me] feel like a walking
Obscenity.
[I] tell [you] yes without thinking.

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She falls softly down from towering pedastools...


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