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Deep one night John and Judi forgot what they'd been talking about. So they kissed for a while. And then they made love. Then they talked about making love until dawn - then Judi's mood inexplicably changed.

Judi began talking shit about John's mother. "She's a fat old cow," laughed Judi. John jumped up, naked and angry. "Shut up, Judi!" he shouted. "If I want any shit out of you, I'll squeeze your head!"

Judi laughed again. And then she slapped John so hard that his expensive diamond stud nose-piercing flew across the living room like a missile. It hit the wall by the window and landed in the kitchen next to a blue plastic basket filled with clean folded laundry.

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by johnjohndoe

Should I laugh or...

( Posted by: Carnifex [Member] On: February 9, 2006 )

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