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Slow green lights across the water
And the kids at Flinders Street Station
Taper jean girls and dark-hair boys.
Did you choke in the casino
Or is it 1933?
Greasy skin and overreaching affection,
Plump girl/sloped boy.
I’m not Gatz and I’m not Gatsby
Wide brown water I walk along
And no slow light or taper jean girl.
The train took her, and he lost the battle
Against the city.



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