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It was to my surprise,a breathe
of fresh air came to pass.
I no longer was looking into the distance
nor neither into my past.

I saw you my love,
waiting with your arms open wide
I ran to you and you held me close.
The embrace I've always dreamed finally arrived

We took a walk on the beach, the night as cool and
calm as can be, When you turned to look me in the eyes
and vowed your love to me. It was you all this time,
and I couldn't believe it was finally here. Never will I
let our love vanish , melt or disappear.

It was only when I finally realized
that this love wasmeant to be.
It overcame the distance so grand,
and the accompanying misery.

Of two worlds joined as one,
but living separate lives.
And the wondering of what the other is doing,
during the morning, noon and night.

No one can ever say to me now,
that distant love doesn't ever work
Because you and I have beaten the odds my dear
with the strongest relationship in the world!
love we have in our midst.

Brandy Garcia

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The following comments are for "It finally came to pass"
by sweetlatinrose

Well it was great to read something positive, nice story/work. Perhaps I am not as verse in the various types of poetry and not seeing the structure of this piece, however I feel it needs to be polished a little bit. If I'm wrong, forgive me.

Regardless, congratulations and best of luck for the two of you!

( Posted by: poliarch [Member] On: February 1, 2006 )

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