Nipples probe bouncy cream.
Wet, frantic pink, leathers bite.
Lust sees a hard night.
The following comments are for "Haiku 46" by castanedalupe
I'll take your word for it on the leather and lust... but does cream really bounce? It never has in my hands. You play these games with rubberised dairy products? The mind, (like the nipples?) boggles...
Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: January 24, 2006
Thanxxxoooxxxooo Lucie and Mobius. I'm not very good, huh? I'm new at this. My brother pushed me into posting. I guess I wasn't ready for my coming-out just yet.
Cream does give the illusion of bouncing when you press it lightly in a certain way. Maybe I'm the only one whose ever noticed that? Maybe I'm just crazy. Back to the old writing board.
Posting here is a great way of getting the confidence to keep writing, and thus to keep improving. I say keep it up. Nobody here will try to crush you... but we will probably tease, a little, if you keep on posting these suggestive haiku...
Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: January 25, 2006
Whew, well I found something
interesting in this.
I can't even remember what it is called, something with leathers and masters/mistresses.
Yea, and that creamy breasts do bounce, not saying the rest of the x-rated I saw. Dang I am dirty minded for an Ol'lady.
YES, stick around with us. Maybe you can teach us a few good things!!!
Welcome to Lit.
Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: January 25, 2006
TC- Welcome to LIt
TC- Thomas Stearns (T.S.) Elliot said: "Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood."
I refer to my 5/7/5, 3/5/3 variations as being "senryupsyched." I find your poem to be of that nature.
Keep writing...and living...
Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 8, 2006
I've read this several times and feel like I found an adult magazine. What is going on in this piece? Confidence is built through experience. It took me a long time to let anyone, other than myself read anything I wrote.
Posted by: MsTink [Member] On: February 8, 2006
DAMN HOT! Do you have a little black dress and a big purple....?
I'm not sure of your intentions, but with Batgirl... or better yet- Catwoman, I'm UP for nipples and cream, wet pink extremes, leather's bite hard all night.
I followed Drsoos here to see what drives his DAMN HOT reactive libido, and Wow! This is great! Short in words but big in suggestive. You've got the soft/porn/erotica talent touch. Why the title Haiku 46?
Haiku 46, somewhat delayed reaction
Not sure how I missed this when it made its debut. Probing nipples and bouncy cream I'll have to take your word for, shy retiring type that I am *insert knowing wink/ butter-wouldn't-melt smile here* but the last line "lust sees a hard night" after all the fun and excitement that comes before it is fantastic. Actually, if that was the whole poem it'd be enough for me. It's suggestive of so much world-weary sexuality, like a tart-with-a-heart chain-smoking in a cheap motel... or, that could just be me, I was dropped on my head as a child and I've not been right since. Either way, I liked it. Cheers,