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anger
wrenching
trembling
I can't escape
No one understands
my thoughts
No one understands
my words
No one understand
my heart
In darkness I stay
unloved, outcast
my soul lingers
near death
almost nothing is left
but this endless eternity
alone
unwanted



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The following comments are for "Unwanted"
by ZonerZone

Zone's Angst
Dark. Without dark there is no light, remember that. Been there. Strange to find out that people really do understand, but often they are not the ones that you need.
You've written this, if its how you are feeling, then why are you feeling this way, what lingers behind your eyes. Another poem?

I'll be following up on it,
Dar

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: January 21, 2006 )

angst?
it was a mood that i was in nothing else. thnks for reading it.

( Posted by: ZonerZone [Member] On: January 22, 2006 )

Zonerzone,
I realize after submitting my comment that "angst" was the wrong word here. Yet there is a feeling after I read your poem that it could be lingering there somewhere. "
anger
wrenching
trembling
I can't escape"

Anxiety.......can be read in it as I did.
Also in reading I had a sense it could be a feeling and nothing more, which is why I questioned "if its how you are feeling, then why are you feeling this way?

This poem of yours brought about memories of how I had felt the same way. Lots of reasons behind our moods and various poems are born that way.

I like how you wrote this and wanted to comment that to you, I've read your other poems and just found that I like how you write.

Dar

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: January 22, 2006 )

dareva
thanks.

( Posted by: ZonerZone [Member] On: January 22, 2006 )

thanks demeter
hey thats cool no sweat I did same thing. (reply pm?) check out my bro when you got a minute. aint got nada but maybe soon cuz im dried out burnt.

( Posted by: ZonerZone [Member] On: February 7, 2006 )





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