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I stand there alone,
But completely surrounded.
The ever shocking silence
Leaves me cold hearted.
I find no one out here with me,
They all have their places to go.
Left behind
Forgotten
I still stand strong
Maybe someone will take notice
All I want is to be not alone.
Will someone find me?
Will someone remember me?
All the faces,
So many faces.
They gaze at me
As though I were in a glass dome
And long since dead.

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Not all scars show. Not all wounds heal. You can't always see the pain someone feels.


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The following comments are for "Nameless"
by IronMaiden

nameless
i like how you write. cool poem. i hear what your saying.

( Posted by: ZonerZone [Member] On: January 22, 2006 )

Nameless,
this is such a haunting poem. I have a few nitpicky suggestions. Economize your words go for compact-impact. For instance: the 1st line in the 1st stanza could start:

Alone, I stand,
yet completely surrounded,
eyes look right through me
as if I were invisible,

The shock of silence
leaves my heart cold,
I'm the only one out here, alone,
everyone else has a place to go

and so forth and so forth...nice job!

( Posted by: eleda [Member] On: January 23, 2006 )





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