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Blowing out smoke, picking at this tugging at that, looking around out the window between this or that, under this or that on the floor still in search for just one more.

Coming up with schemes wasting time, robberies hold ups, bad checks in lines, returns, hell donate blood, food stamps,wic coupons, gift certificates nothing was so intricate.

Mob action, give a ways, run a ways, fools carrying around parhanailer tools, squats here and there closed in or out in the open.

Got to get that ill off no matter how, where, or when but now up my nose in my vein smoke in my mouth straight through to my brain.

Tweak this tweak that got to hurry and get back take this hit to the head, the arm the nose glasses tinted with rose, no more pain- no feelings at all blowing out smoke.

Smelling bad no soap or water, selling everything you had and yourself cheap, and no food to eat...
..in the stores stealing meat, maybe chips here or there or just a cigarette too much despair.

Hair undone looking unnatural, the walking dead passed by a mirror and still I said, not bad (looking good) mean while just a bone whose souls about to be hauled home, bag box with a whole lot of chatter get it together, see the matter?...

...I know, I'm just blowing out smoke.



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LMJ


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The following comments are for "Addicted...."
by LMJ

Interesting..
Your poem makes me think of a number of friends that I have. You nailed it bang on. Good job

( Posted by: dentt [Member] On: January 18, 2006 )

hair undone

You have a good way of illustrating the ugly in a very casual fashion. I enjoyed this especially: "Hair undone looking unnatural", I would have probably said "Hair undone looking natural", but that's just me. Your poem is effective, and I am sure hits home to many people on some level or the other.

Just shooting out addiction,

macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: January 18, 2006 )

No longer even chasing/
...Just shattered...

LMJ- I read your poems, hearing them spoken..Representations true and heartfelt.


An ignored part of American reality..

Oh, yeah, there was a bountiful poppy crop harvested in Afghanistan this past year. We can't have 'friendly' warlords turn against us...So heroin continues to flow, keeping at bay/killing thousands of poor folks in cities across America. Deplorable.

Respectfully,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 18, 2006 )

Addiction...
girl, back at you...I feel you. This read well,
grateful to all that isn't touched by the curse.
But, truthfully, I'm fortunate, with my f'ed brain chemistry it doesn't mix...although I have a meth head brother...I guess my personal curse is a blessing, well, in this case it is.

not tweakin',
Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: January 20, 2006 )

bobby,lucie,macbeth,robin,dentt...
I sincerely thank you all for your comments!
it is sad,(addiction) but it is REAL and an issue that some would love to sweep under the rug.
-Most of the things that I write about has affected me enough to feel passionately in one form or another, it is an education to all those who live through rose colored glasses.
Life is simply what it is, it is the choices, that seperate us in any individual way really.
again I say thank you.
La'Shea

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: January 21, 2006 )

I agree
Dentt I must say I agree completely with what you say...LMJ couldn't have written this any better good job...PEace

( Posted by: twistymisty [Member] On: March 21, 2006 )





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