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-*Don't Try This At Home*-


Shaved my head, again.

Sick of your games...

Now, play mine

It's really quit nice

No combs or brushes

Just a variety of toboggan's

Tangled rat nests are gone

To the ease of smooth skin

Not easy on the eye's

The train tracks of scars

Map my being of misery

That was hidden beneath

The gray cloud of you...

Whew! "Cold outside, isn't it"?


Disclaimer necessary...I got my hair trimmed yesterday, brought back a memory, I'd just soon forgotten...I tried this at home, shaved my head and came so close to losing it as well...The first time, I got a frown. The second time, he tried to get rid of the site, wound up with more stitches and a face to match the head...not pretty. Well, I made it, he's doing 10-15yrs, be out when I'm 50 to 55 yrs... keep my eye's checked and my skills handy, he'll be back...

me again, Robin...I gotta' find me a second home
close to the equator, seriously.

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The following comments are for "Warning..."
by Robinbird

Scalped soul
Bob said it - raw and riveting indeed. There's something so human here, Robin, childlike and world-weary all at once. A poem with big eyes and perfect pitch. And the last line bites.

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: January 7, 2006 )

Bob, good to see you...we understand...sometimes a disclaimer is all a girls got, really. Thanks for your thoughtful comment...

and, it is good to see you.


( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: January 7, 2006 )

sometimes, I wish I could or would, pull a punch...generally, I don't. My soul does, sometime, spread in an autopsy of self via words...
"there has to be reason" sometimes "that"
is all a girl/woman has got, too.

Thanks you, for your thoughtful comment as well...


( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: January 7, 2006 )

I agree with Bob, the line that really said it for me was 'Map my being of misery' - excellent. If the only thing I can find to criticise is one typo - then it's hardly worth the bother. This poem sings of discordancy (I mean that in a good way) in your life experiences, it doesn't just bite the bullet, it chews straight through.

Take care

( Posted by: ogg [Member] On: January 8, 2006 )

I agree with Bob on all of it, really...and appreciate his insight...Caitlin, as well, genuine...

It's just a bitch, some of the time, especially
when it's cold, set your clock, and I'm working on that.

I do believe, through my experience's, I pray,
someone will get some good out of it, maybe not
repeat or even go there, so, I's good
therapy, too...

Thanks much,

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: January 8, 2006 )

Must like unmasking Robin,
Girl you have guts and your self-esteem is getting stronger each and every day, don't just bear the scars but WEAR them well.

I really like the rawness of this poem, saying so much without really going into description, brevity. No, you didnt' need the disclaimer. That alone could be another poem, so become a serial poet.......LOL. Robin, never let anyone take your "home" away. No matter where you set your arse, it will be your "home".

Best to you Robin,
Good to get all this out, makes for great reading.

Go girl,

Dar ;)

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: January 8, 2006 )

No Mask...
Dar, means much to me your inspiring acceptance.
I have my struggle's, as we all do, just different roads...and yes, my self-esteem has changed for the better...I speak of faith often,
for me, it has been my saving grace...the best thing to happen to me in years, is this site,
divine intervention, in my heart, I know it. Matters not, that I'm a beginner, what matters is, I much to learn but, I get a kick out of it...we all have something to give, and I've seen much generosity. That is so good for my spirit, that's trying to break me hope.

Home, what a multi-faceted thought for me...that ones tough, appreciate you expressing your sense of my need, I really needed your
words...another area to addressed.

Take care and write on!

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: January 8, 2006 )

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