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Day by day,
Night after night.
Ideas drive around my head,
like a Nascar race
inside my skull.
Maybe that is why,
I'm always smelling burning rubber.
These ideas as they race,
eventually crash into the wall.
each one desperate to get onto a page,
no wonder I got a pounding headache.

if the pen is mighter then the sword then the word processer must be mighter then the missile

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The following comments are for "A writer's Nascar race"
by johntellall

Word race...
Good imagery, and I smell the rubber as well...
the hardest part for me is the stop to start, I keep pen and paper on me at all times, because the start to the finish might happen anywhere...

enjoyed, Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: January 6, 2006 )

Johntellall - Nascar
Perhaps you are a Gemini, aren't you? If you are, you just couldn't slow your thinking down. English is my second language, so I am not really in the right position to tell you, but I couldn't help it because I liked this piece very much and I couldn't stand a few things that I know you just overlooked: 'Thes' should be 'these', 'desprate' - 'desperate', though this one's okay as it's written as it's being read; and the last one 'wander', I know it's 'wonder'. I hope you don't get mad or offended as I myself also welcome corrections in my own writings. I love this piece, that one's for sure. ;-)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: January 6, 2006 )

for the record
for the record i am a Leo

( Posted by: johntellall [Member] On: January 6, 2006 )

Haha, I like that. It gives you a funny visual, and makes sence.

( Posted by: pinkfroggy [Member] On: February 15, 2006 )

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