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seeing the sun arise
in her velvet eyes
i can hear her speaking as she drinks.

the muffled sounds of freedom
under her muffled sounds of cries
she is beatiful
she is ugly.

she contrasts her movements
focusing on one aspect at a time
yet trying to handle ten.

she is our inner strength
our inner weakness
she is our inner child
with a hint of maturity.

she is a hypocrite
she follows her own ways
she contrasts her movements
swaying right and left.

she is i as i as she
and i wouldn't have it any other way.

for she loves him, and cares
and threw him her freedom is being heard
and threw him she is everything she wasn't.

she's in love like a drunkard sailor and his ship.

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