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Once upon a time
There was a little girl
With eyes so soft
And precious as pearl

She lived in her world of make believe
One she thought would never decieve

At nine she thought
The world was fine

Then he came and took it away
At her party he had his way
Her youth was no more
And she could not stay
Fore, with child she became that day

Her baby was her love
Great with pearl eyes
Yet, her father, his father
He did become, the father of her only son

She could not bear another
And the baby did well
Not knowing of his birth from hell

Her brother, she had him think
The hate she felt with every wink
A crash she told took him away
His grandfather to meet in heaven someday...

A mothers love will ever endear
To save our children when loves unclear...


To my friend, may you find peace...

Robin




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The following comments are for "Child with Child"
by Robinbird

WOW
This is amazing I love the way it makes me want to cry good job most poems can't make me feel emotional keep it up PEace

( Posted by: twistymisty [Member] On: December 18, 2005 )

twisty&lucie&child...
my friend works at the local mental health center, and true and sad this story is, to clarifly further may help me write her story...
She is 1 yr younger than myself, and over many a
beer or two's, she decided not to tell her brother/son, whom is happily married to a woman that had her tubes tied and can't have more and he is cool with that she is a good Christian, he loves her and is okay with not having their children...
Things sometimes work in mysterious ways...

Honestly, I did not know how to tell this story,
and I'm inspired to tell the rest of her story, and she in tears thinks it should be told...

Thank Ya'll, for reading and letting me know.

Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: December 18, 2005 )

Robin, heartwrenching,
Gave me shivers to think all the "what-ifs" here. This could have been me. My sisters. How tragic and dark. Glad her son turned out to be ok. Other kids born this way have not been so lucky. The gentics just mess up.

I think you did write this story in a good and decent way. She is blessed to have you in her life. Great to have life-long friendships that outlast all the abuses and neglects.....nice.

Have a wonderful holiday Robin. Megweetch,
Dar

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: December 19, 2005 )

Story must be told
This story is sure to help other girls in the same situation...and telling it will help her deal with it too....This makes me feel that I've led a blessed life...wonderful write....Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: December 19, 2005 )

child
this is touchy and u did a great a job

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: December 19, 2005 )

Kitty/Dar/Grace/#9
Thank ya'll so much for reading and understanding, life can be hell...my father has said many times to me...if you put your troubles in a hat, you better hope you draw your own out of that hat...

Dar, it's good to see you...I know from the things we've shared we have a special understanding that transcends words, Bless you and those babies of yours a wonderful year...
Is your daughter doing OK, pm me and let me know, I've thought of her often...

Kacee, you sweetheart you, how you make me smile! Love to you and your Bubba's....

Chap#9, I feel so good that this touched you and the rating....

Grace, God Bless you!

Love ya'll all!

Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: December 21, 2005 )

Dah/Chap #1
I'm working in a hurry, still pcless and I make mistakes, Chap#1, sorry 'bout that...

My Birthday is coming up Dec 30th, I just got this feeling...What I'm getting for my birthday,
soon I'll not be pcless!

Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: December 21, 2005 )

Joy
Robin;
All I can say is that I find "Joy and Blessings" in this poem.. You have God's favor! Continue to be a blessing to someone else, and God is also letting them be a blessing to you.


Blessings,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: December 22, 2005 )

LIFE...
when life happens to us, be it good or evil we must adjust" turn our frowns up side down" so to speak tragic but real and yes..

some body's go to TELL the story so that others behind us can grow from them, "each one teach one".

gently written, bold read and in depth, I sincerely pray that she finds peace as well.

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: December 23, 2005 )





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