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Taking & Taking
But when will I give?
There's only one way out,
but it's a long way down.
Will it hurt?
What can we do to avert it?
Is there really forgiveness for the Damned?
or is it just an idea too good to resist for us sinners one and all with such a long way to fall
down and out in a round with 8 more to go
aim it at the sky and way we go
punching a hole in a sky as blue as my junkie veins can be
my stomach turns and I exhale into the Sweat-Choked Night

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