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3 hours 57 minutes...

And as I have walked lifes path well worn,
I've seen friends die and my children born,
I've been loved and hated in equal measures,
suffered the pains and savoured some pleasures.

I've tasted sweet victory and bitter defeat,
I have been deceived and yet practised deceit,
I've been immeasurably happy and ineffably sad,
been the dutiful husband, been an absentee Dad.

I've lost and been loved, loved and been lost,
I've realised the value but not the overall cost,
Had a go at marriage, enjoyed time on my own,
I've met hearts of gold and hearts barely grown.

I've met bastards and angels along the route,
I've been acutely naive and less often astute,
Made loads of mistakes, got some stuff right,
I've acted with kindness, and reacted in spite.

And now I just try to do as I would be done to,
remembering to thine ownself always be true,
Accept that there are always differing views,
A mile is a lifetime in another mans shoes.

Ignore mishap and misfortune with head held high,
Not always succeeding, but still willing to try.

14 feb 2002


"Only actions matter, for any fool can dream -
and wishes count for nothing in the overall scheme..."

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The following comments are for "3 hours 57 minutes..."
by looptheory

3 hours 57 minutes
That's almost four hours, the span of time you composed this poem? It could be three years and fifty-seven days for me writing a stanza :-)

This is good, looptheory, to see the balance in life is hard for others to see, that's why there are people who are proud, are self-righteous and indifferent. Thank you for the wisdom in this.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: December 17, 2005 )

this is ying/yang with extras, I don't critique, not really qualified, but, this is good, just Robin...but, I say seen many images and that is a good thing...good write...hey, I agree with Peter, and Peter, you have a good heart...


( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: December 17, 2005 )

in coming back after reading this no less than 5 times, like said I'm not to much on critique, but after thinking about that thought, I can critique and qualified, I have earned some stripes...loop, this is better than I first read.
It's so much full of life and you did a good life
picture in words of how it can be and how for some it far as the plug for Peter, he has earned his stripes, too, and I've never told him, I felt like it was a good time to do so.
loop, you did a great job with your 3hrs and 57min., hope and plan to see more of you in the future...not to upset anyone about my critique
credentials, many of you know, I'm still learning
and I need still your input...


( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: December 18, 2005 )

3 hours etc
I hated this straight after I wrote it. I thought it was like Hallmark cards gone slacker hippy.

It is, however, an wonderful experience to have people interpret it in exactly the spirit in which it was crayonned.

thanks all.

( Posted by: looptheory [Member] On: December 19, 2005 )

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