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“So long
And goodnight”
They say
While they’re passing by
“What a shame
To see you go”
You’ve worked so hard
For so little
How’s that for irony?
Feels like you are chasing something
Not meant to be caught?
Or something you’re not supose
To have?
But you still do
No matter
How it burns
and scorches
“Wasn’t she/he the one
who was gonna make it
to the top?”
They ask
But you know
They never gave
a damn
They just wanted
a piece of the glory

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Having everything you ever wanted is nice, Having everything you need dreamed of is better.


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The following comments are for "Jump? How High?"
by DampheirInBlack

Hey there...
Neat image there... I might combine some of the lines to make it flow more easily... whole thoughts I might leave together, as in:

"So long and good night" they say as they're passing by // what a same to see you go. // You've worked so hard for // so little, how's that for irony? .... etc

Keep up the good work! --dc

( Posted by: ak7raPLT [Member] On: December 18, 2005 )





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