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Dry, fraying grass
Clear, dreamy sky
Emotions
And Dreams
Of you
Flying by.
Checkered blanket
On coarse, gritty sand
Remembering the feeling
Of your soft, silky hand,
I lie back and nap.

Oasis of green,
Grasses of blue,
Yearning for water
And I'm yearning for you.
The lemonade's sour
'Neath the radio tower
And I'm still wishing
You could be here
With me.

That night under the stars
We danced and we sang
And played that guitar
The one with the twang.
We sipped sharp 'nuff vodka
And let ourselves sway
I was daddy's perfect daughter
You said you would stay.
Now those days are over
Now those games are won
And, feeling sick,
I lie under
The blistering sun.




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The following comments are for "Blue Grass Blues"
by Kambriel

Nice.
Kambriel,

This was very nice. I am not sure what about it I liked the most but it was definantly very good.

Later,
Dras

( Posted by: Drastine [Member] On: August 23, 2002 )

Blue Grass Blues
this piece has rhythm. It also conjures up the warm pleasantness of the occasion.
I like it!

( Posted by: Sercombe [Member] On: February 4, 2004 )





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