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Turn inward
Towards your moments of despair
Your loneliness
Your aching
Your angst
Tears on cold and silent pillow
Hands shivering from lack of another

Turn outward
To those you may relieve
Their loneliness
Their aching
Their angst
Dry their tears
Warm their hands

Turn inward
Towards your moments of shame
Your sorrow
Your sadness
Your longing
Regret and wishing to mend the bridge

Turn outward
To those who may be shamed
Their sorrow
Their sadness
Their longing
Heal them in their need to mend their bridge


------
Jewel L


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The following comments are for "Turn"
by JewelL

If only...
your sentiments are beautiful-

best to you-
Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: December 3, 2005 )

turn
This is impressive....my favorite lines are:
Tears on cold and silent pillow
Hands shivering from lack of another


I like the use of personification ...so eloquent..
I guess one needs to read ur piece more than once so he will not miss any of its beautiful and powerful effect

pleased to read you

all the best .Hiba

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: December 3, 2005 )

Many thanks!
Thanks to all of you for your wonderful comments! I'm blushing :-)

( Posted by: JewelL [Member] On: December 7, 2005 )





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