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One morning,
A soldier,
With weapon,
In hand,
Decided,
To kill,
A sand nigger.

Then a chink,
A wetback,
A coon ass,
A dago,
A bastard,
A moron,
A spic,
A hillbilly,
A hayseed,
A holy roller,
A fat ass,
A white trash honky,
A pollock,
A gook,
A whore,
A fag,
A bitch,
A jew boy,
A jap,
A jungle bunny,
A rag head,
A queer,
A commie,
A cripple,
A negra,
A nurd,
A lunatic,
A kraut,
A kike,
A grease bag,
A porch monkey,
A red man,
A tunnel rat,
A dyke,
A yard ape,
And a camel jockey.

It was then,
He decided,
To kill Jesus.

Doug Soderstrom, Ph.D.
November 30, 2005



























































------
G. Doug Soderstrom, Ph.D.


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The following comments are for "To Kill A Sand Nigger"
by dougsoderstrom

No agnostic poet?..
Doug,
I see "lunatic" made soldier's list...A pervert, pedophile priest,..or diviant, sociopathic congenital lier, perhaps?...Or just your garden variety twisted, abusive parent/spouse, despot pimp, drug lord?...

Clip on,
B7L





( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: December 1, 2005 )

Hello?
What happened to my critique?

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: December 1, 2005 )

Strangedaze
Dear Strangedaze:

I'm sorry....... As you can see I rewrote the "Sand Nigger" poem. I wrote a nice response to your comment, and then did a rather stupid thing..... I deleted the past "Sand Nigger" poem, and without thinking also deleted your comment and my response to it! I felt very badly about that, because you had a very thoughtful comment, and my response was rather thoughtful as well. So if you are game to make another comment, I will respond in kind to your next comment.

Your friend,
Doug

( Posted by: dougsoderstrom [Member] On: December 2, 2005 )

Killing Jesus
I would imagine from this that Jesus died many times...

Doug, have you ever read "Ragman" by Walter Wangerin? I think it's something you would enjoy.

thanks for the stirring thoughts this day-

best to you-
Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: December 2, 2005 )

slaughter
slaughter slaughter slaughter....this is the image that appears to me as i read ur piece

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: December 2, 2005 )

Elizabeth

Elizabeth:

Thanks..... right now I will check out "Ragman."

Doug

( Posted by: dougsoderstrom [Member] On: December 4, 2005 )

Awash Across Slow Evolutionary Plateaus
I liked your original Sand Nigger a little better -- there all the names came across as curses which gave your final name a great punch. Your ultimate point, too, seemed a little subtler yet more engaging.

Surprisingly, I find myself fond of the way you're using your commas at the end of each line to add a bit of dramatic pacing to the read, here.

Intriguing process of conceptual evolution. And poetry, too. I like.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: December 6, 2005 )

Tap5000 & Hazelfaern
Each of you.... thanks for your appreciation of my piece.

Tap5000.... What does W.O.G.LEB refer to?

Hazelfaern.... Thanks for the comparative feedback on the different forms of the poem, and I'm glad that you feel the commas enable "the pacing" of my piece.

Doug

( Posted by: dougsoderstrom [Member] On: December 6, 2005 )

Tap5000
Thanks....... Doug.

( Posted by: dougsoderstrom [Member] On: December 7, 2005 )





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