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You hunger for my soul
But you forget
Itís not mine to give
I ache to hear you profess your love
But scream to silence you
I know the evil that possesses me
I will not let my demons
Trap you
Vanish my dear in the dungeons of my mind
Vanish before all hell brakes loose
Vanish and leave me
suffocating on the noose
Of my unfaithfulness.


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by abi

hi has been so long since i last read a work of u....
ur piece here is more kind of hard expressions and lack a sense of sentiment..but i find it good and artistic ...i like the contradictions that it holds

all the best

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: December 2, 2005 )

thanks heba for your comment , it has been some time since i last visited lit org i always wish i do more , but managing time is not one of my best attributes.
it's true that this piece is a bit harsh , but so is the situation , it's the kind of situation that could crush your life if not careful i tried to imagine how it might feel and it's quite nightmarish.
anyways thanks again for reading and taking the time to comment.

( Posted by: abi [Member] On: December 4, 2005 )

Wow, this is harsh!! Good piece though. Hope things are well sweetie. My prayers are always with you.

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: December 4, 2005 )

so effective
why dear?why do u show this sadness?i'm sure u're not the way u described urself though u might have felt u touched the bottom of my heart and created a sense of inspiratin on me.though it is harsh, its words have a sense of love. i dunno why, but it made me feel that it has been written out of a huge love which turned to be wild.
keep working u're doing a good job

( Posted by: tinylulu [Member] On: December 5, 2005 )

tinylulu and mona
thank you both for taking the time to read and comment.
mona all is well , i was just trying to create a certain situation an d guess what it might feel like so it's not really a personal experience , so don't worry!!
tinylulu you are right there is a lot of love , i tried to create the mood of mixed feelings for a doomed love. i am so flattered that it touched you , thanks for the encouragment.

( Posted by: abi [Member] On: December 9, 2005 )

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