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Feral with primordial fervor thrumming
We lean into our bright, shallow windows
To lap at fire through earnest eyes, to slake
Each eternally restless inner Prometheus

How we are all children by this light’s shade
How our urchin hands clasp at fractured fables
While our shadowed lips spill the broken language
Of naked experience, its linear distortions

Yet in and through this spill, our ribald chanting jibes
Streams a liquid wealth betwixt, pixilated, a quicksilver
Flashing in rolling warbles of inspiration, restlessly
Combustable, transformable, blinding as raw alcohol

Weaving, then, midst object and metaphor, phantasm and craft
Intoxicated, blustering, saturated and trailing an impermeable ink
Across a webbed and infinite mock-sky, we are working through reaction
The mercurial alchemy of connectedness – we are lit

We are lit by play’s pure plasma, freely broken up and scattered
We are lit by a seeker’s bold desire to see further beyond the known
We are lit by the blushing of demigods – discovery – the fire within the flame

"All the darkness in the world
cannot put out the light
of one candle"

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The following comments are for "Lit"
by hazelfaern

Lit up, and up...
Tee hee. Take one struggling wordsmith, refract through a serious poetic prism... sit back and bask in the 'thrum of primordial fervor'. I like the way you do this - glamorise an inglorious mess with a soupcon of insight and a string of bejewelled images. (Particularly taken with the 'urchin hands clasping at fractured fables' - faceless and nameless, we are all unfathered children here, and our fables rarely unfractured.)

The unstructured roaming of this poem mirrors the virtual world rather cleverly - finally beaching up against something which forces it to pause, reflect and repeat. I find the final line somehow inverted - do the demigods blush, or do we, in their mercurial presence?

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: November 26, 2005 )

"Infinite mock-sky/ Lit"

Jennifer- Also found "linear distortions" perfect..It is amazing,..this collective "connectedness.".

Have read several times. Am certain I'll revisit.

Enjoyed read,

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: November 26, 2005 )

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