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If I closed my eyes,
let the darkness close in
feel the warmth of my mind
would my terrible feelings die?

Would these emotions dissolve
with a flicker of my eyelashes?
Could I close out the world by merely blocking the lights?

If I could pull the blinds
lock the doors,
disappear under a mountain of sheets.
would everything be okay?

The pain in my stomach
to the false state of mind Iím driven to.
This paranoia, this anxiety over everything
Let my closing eyes lead me to release.

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The following comments are for "forgetting by closing my eyes"

DeyesB/ Of Angst...
Deyes- You were one of, if not first, to comment on my initial Lit-post, as I recall..135 or so later, it's good to read you.

I also seem to recall you being young. Under 20?
Anyway, your angst emoted here makes me think that..

We all go through this period..It will pass..My recent poem posted: "Sea of Light (II)," was penned when I was 20. "First Love," at 18. Point being, 30 years later, I'm still alive, writing and amazed almost every day.

Keep putting pen to paper...and live,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: November 21, 2005 )

DEB - forgetting
Mac, to disappear under a mountain of sheets is always the right choice when one needs forgetting... the same thing when one needs remembering. Indeed, the act of closing the eyes have that effect that the darkness is wrapping, enclosing the mind, fighting its warmth (that's what I visualized in your first stanza), and the minds warmth winning over darkness: produces visions and it was no darkness at all! The exrecise could somehow be fruitful, you only have to be quick in putting everything into writing?!

Thanks for this read. Always watching out for something new from you!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: November 23, 2005 )

closing eyes
DemoneEyesBlue, first time to read u I guess though I think you are of the earlier writer to see in this site..
closing ur eyes and coverig means not only to forget as Peter said but it means EScaping...u r just escaping and once u open ur eyes u will keep unning again...I think the best thing to release face the fear and the troubles...just stand against the winds till they pass....Fear the fear and do it anyway..

wish u all the best

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: November 23, 2005 )

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