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For Jay

I know you fear dying young like your father
I can see it in your jaw line and beneath your huge eyes
I know you like me a lot and if we were different sexes
we could be intimate
I know you know I love your girlfriend too
I am uncomfortable because I have scars from last girl
I wish you were my brother
and I wish you wouldn't drink so fast
You have plenty of time
no need to rush us out the door
I hope she doesn't shatter your heart
Because the harder they come
I hope you guys make babies and call me uncle Leo
And everything ends in tragic beauty

------
Lee Leslie can be found @ myspace.com/expressionsession and Leo.altpro.net


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The following comments are for "For Jay"
by LeeLeslie

Fear and loving
I enjoyed this - there's a sharply natural quality in the writing, a little like Ginsberg in its stream-of-elegiac-conciousness tone. But to me, the ending fell awkwardly, too abruptly soon. Is this perhaps a fragment of something larger?

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: November 19, 2005 )

Thanks though
Nope thats it. Short poem I guess.

( Posted by: LeeLeslie [Member] On: November 19, 2005 )

Lee - For Jay
This could be one, touching and thoughtful tribute, Lee. Even if I am not Jay, I was touched by this poem. Is he dying? Like what the first and last lines were implying? The honesty of this poem still nags at me.

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: November 21, 2005 )

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No he is not dying but heart attacks run in his family as the first line states. I hope the honesty nags you in a good way!

( Posted by: LeeLeslie [Member] On: November 21, 2005 )





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