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Mystic Knight

A unicorn thy noble steed is
but neither its silver hair
nor its golden alicorn
match thy radiant name.

Every lady far and wide
whether noble or common
prays to lay her eyes on you
knowing it’ll cause
blindness of the heart.

Every man across the land
wishes to meet you in a fight
knowing beforehand
defeat will be his prize.

Thou lest us all wonder
whether thou art mortal
or of a diff’rent kind.
But we all know thy good heart
and how thou enchanted us all.



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by PamHKyle

Mystic Knight
Hi Pam, I love Unicorns and tales of Knights and Fair Maidens. Good imagery in bringing in the days of yore to the present. I liked it.

( Posted by: eleda [Member] On: November 18, 2005 )

Mystic Knight
The poem lacks rhythm and is hard to read. Using old English is difficult enough. Consider the first stanza."A unicorn thy noble steed is but neither its silver hair nor its golden alicorn match thy radiant name." Thy steed the unicorn is noble neither... The third verse makes very little sense. Knights fought for a reason, good versus evil, so why would all men want to fight him?? The last stanza should be thou hast enchanted us all

( Posted by: Txpoet [Member] On: February 28, 2006 )





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