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Do you see the same sun as I,
Communing with the evening sky,
Penetrating through windswept clouds,
Of crimson, ochre and amber hues?

Do you have the same sense as I
Silently spinning on this tiny orb,
Through vastness, throughout time,
until we spin no more?

Will you see the same stars as I
As Sirius takes his place
Amidst the emperors of the night,
Looking down through the firmament
As we pass him by?

Do you walk the earth as I,
Touching her skin of umber dust
Her lakes, glittering; her rivers flowing,
Her dense forests of verdant green,
and organic must?

Do you see what I see,
Or feel the same things?
Are you even aware of me
Or are we just a dream?

"Until the juice ferments a while in the cask,
it isn't wine. If you wish your heart to be bright, you must do a little work." Rumi

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The following comments are for "The Seer"
by eleda

The Seer
I enjoyed this thoughtful poem, Eleda, especially the 4th stanza. I'd quibble about the last line of the 3rd, however ("as we pass him by," referring to Sirius. The perspective just sounds wrong there and I think you'd do well to change the sentence.

( Posted by: Alondra [Member] On: November 17, 2005 )

Tinalouise, Seer
Thank you TL, for sharing that with me. I truly appreciate it. BTW I have difficulty trying to log into this site. Do you experience the same thing?

Om Shanti, shanti, shanti

( Posted by: eleda [Member] On: November 22, 2005 )

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