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No, I told you what you wanted to hear so,
What the fuck do you want from me now?
Had to lie about what I felt just to make
You happy
Even though it hurt me
But did you care?
All you wanted was your security
Didn't matter if that meant sacrificing me
Oh yeah that may seem selfish to you but
You were the only one I had to love
We were supose to make some kind of life together
And where are you now?
Off sniffing coke...things to make you numb to
Just to forget me?
I know
Just as well as you that you lie to yourself
As much as I do
But the thing with you is
You don't know reality from your fucked up haze
Dazed out and shattered
What's the matter?
Is this too much for you?
Am I supose to feel sorry now?
Have sympathy?
Watch and shower you in empathy?
Is that how it's supose to be when
All eyes are turned to you?
And not me?
Because if that's the case you've got something else coming
Because...I could give a shit less what you think
NOW I am trying to push you to your limit
To make to think
Of
All the fucked up things you did to me
And would have done if I stayed
And how you're going to feel without me
How you'll be just as lost
Just as...
I'll let you figure it out on your own
After all
You said something like
"I didn't leave you...you left me?"
It's funny though because
I felt the bullet through my heart
And I could have sworn
That it was you who pulled the trigger


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Having everything you ever wanted is nice, Having everything you need dreamed of is better.


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The following comments are for "So You Care Now?"
by DampheirInBlack

so you care now
Ick, because first, there is the blowing off of steam. Which is what you do here. Except that a poem is not the place to blow off steam. A poem is the place where steam that has been blown off becomes catharsis and transformation.
This text belongs in the hands of the person to whom it is addressed, or maybe, failing that, in the pages of a personal diary.
Unresolved anger and perpetuating conflict do not make good premises for a poem. I suggest you get beyond your primary process, and rewrite this from there. It will be a much shorter, more focused, and better poem.
Thank you for this opportunity to examine the many possible levels of conflict that can arise between two persons.

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: November 19, 2005 )

Yikes!!!!!!!!
I agree with lucie. boy were you pissed!! I can feel your anger and your pain, this just allows you more room to grow as a person as well as a writer,re-read it and count to 10 then readdress it to paper. but, at lest we know that you're human!!!!!!!! LOL

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: December 15, 2005 )





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