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At breakfast
I put 2 cups on the table,
2 plates and 2 sets of cutlery,
realizing my mistake
as I poor out the coffee.

As I quickly shop for groceries
during my lunch break,
I buy 2 pieces of meat
and your favorite cookies,
realizing, after I paid,
it wasnít necessary.

When I unlock the door
in the evening and open it,
I yell ĎIím home!í
getting no reply,
no hot cup of tea waiting for me
nor finding you in the kitchen
already started preparing dinner.

I miss you terribly,
I feel like Iím only living half
when youíre not with me.
I miss your arms around me,
your passionate kisses
your kind words
and all those little things
that make us live in such harmony.

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The following comments are for "Missing"
by PamHKyle

I really liked this simple piece, it had powerful imagery and i could feel the dissapointment and the sadness after each verse. Thanks

( Posted by: namelessdragoon [Member] On: November 16, 2005 )

Wow, this...
it feels, it hurts, it is true.
I like the way you have such a wide array, field, of emotion yet none of the words are particalury sad.

except for that one 'error'
"as i poor out the coffe"

I like how both ways it is still great. By writing POOR you show how rich you were with him, how he brightened our day.

The number 2, which seems so important, loses value in the last two stanzas. Maybe even the title could be 2. I don't know. This is just random rambling of a 16 year old. anyway, i still like the poem, it is great.

Oh, and by the by, i'm checking all your poems out, i like the way you write. Expect a private message from me soon...


( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: November 16, 2005 )

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