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First cry and last moan ...
Rock the cradle, tend the stone.
Eager sprint and jaded sprawl -
as it should be: rise and fall.

Born to present face and name,
pick up the pieces of the game.
Cycle in and cycle out;
battle blues and hues of doubt.

Eager sprint ... jaded sprawl ...
Once again it will enthrall.
Mark the rituals sweetly known;
rock the cradle, tend the stone.

Lark Beltran


The following comments are for "Wheel"
by Alondra

Rock the Dradle

With so many busy people on this site it is not surprising that a gem occasionally gets missed, though I must saw that with viewing figures of *4 I am surprised their are no previous comments on this one.

Content, excellent and provokes a lifetime of thought. Poetic style, superb , exactly matched to the rhythm of life.

Why have you not posted more, I fell on this when chasing your comments on others poetry and you have certainly given me a sampler that makes me want more.

I am sure now that a few of us are back on site others will follow me here to see the quality of your first post on Lit.

Sorry it took me 4 months to find it!

Have Fun,


( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: March 25, 2006 )

Tend the Stone
Sorry I meant 'Rock the Cradle'
(unable to edit comments)

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: March 25, 2006 )

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