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Brain solvent
Contaminates my DNA.
It flowed in through the two streams
That converged to form the river Me.
Thus I write my life’s stories
With ever increasing urgency
So that I will always remember.
When I have forgotten the way to the grocery,
I will still be able to recall the life I knew
With the ones I loved
Until I forget how to read.

Perhaps then some kind person
Will read my stories aloud to me
Until I no longer understand.

------
Time flies like an arrow. Fruit flies like a banana. - Groucho Marx



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The following comments are for "An Offering to Mnemosyne"
by LinnieRed

Flux and Memory
Linnie ~ I like the unforced, natural quality of this poem. It rings true and it's sweet but in a slightly dark, and yet slightly humorous way. I was a little thrown off by your first two lines -- are they an allusion to alzheimers?

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: November 12, 2005 )

Ego, Id and Introspection
Really sharply observed... though interestingly, I found this neither sweet nor humorous. More of a knowing nod to the oncoming train of inevitable degeneration. 'Brain solvent'... on first reading, I assumed this was just a neat way of saying your mind and body were so bound up together that to feel whole, to feel lasting, it's essential to record your mental progress as well as your physical. (A familiar concept here?) Now, reading Hazelfearn, I find that this itself could be interpreted as a reference to mental deterioration. I wonder which - if either - it is?

In any case, this struck me as the perfect rationale for the hubris inherent in writing a journal - never mind a poem!

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: November 12, 2005 )

the way we were


I gather that you fear an inherited predisposition to dementia from both parents. Research indicates that the mind is like a muscle, benefitting from mental gymnastics. Your writing is likely a good brain workout. Nice piece.

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: November 12, 2005 )

An Offering
yes yes very nice.

Namaste
Guru Mohammad Jesus Bernstein

( Posted by: MohammadJesusBernstein [Member] On: November 13, 2005 )

Haze/Mobi/Soos re: Mnemosyne
The "brain solvent" reference was indeed a reference to the fact that dementia - presumably Alzheimer's - apparently runs on both sides of my family. Soosie, I like your idea of writing as preventative exercise. Perhaps I should also dig out my calculus textbook for a little cross-training! Thanks to all of you for your kind comments.

Robinbird - thanks for the rating. You're very generous! And MoJeBern, thanks for dropping by.

( Posted by: LinnieRed [Member] On: November 14, 2005 )





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