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A small significant ache envelopes
the space between heart and mind,
its not a sudden stab but
a slow and constant throbbing.
It draws away composure as it
eats at the core of what should be,
versus what is.

Whisper, dont want for anything,
but truth be told, I want for you,
for what should be,
what could be
and more painfully for what is not.

Hypocrite!
Deceiver!
Is this what Ive become?
Living knowing denial
splits my spirit in two.
Im left with half of who I am,
since the other half found refuge in you.

Resign myself to hurt,
Delve fully into torment,
For in anguish
the dream of who we are
remains alive.


------
I am on a journey. Looking for Me. Everyday I get a little closer. The more time goes by the more I realize I'm always changing. This journey could take forever... Renae L. Soler


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The following comments are for "Age of Torment"
by nae411

Lucid as Anguish
Nae ~ What an intriguing final stanza. I just wish there were more specifics here because I'm finding myself slightly uncertain about the tone you're using in those last few lines -- I could almost read a touch of irony into it, I'm not sure. Still, it's an interesting statement and one I think I'll have rolling around in my head for the rest of the day.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: November 12, 2005 )

Nae/ That which is not
Renae- Intriguing read. I, like hazelfaern, found touches of irony. Levels....

Enjoyed. Am sure to return.

B7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: November 12, 2005 )

Eric, Hazelfaern, Bobby
Oh Eric, you are one clever, funny, silly man. Thank you for your comments.

Hazelraern, You are right there is meant to be irony in this. I can hear it in my head but I suppose if you could hear my thoughts you'd really have something rolling around in your head all day! Thank you.

Bobby, thank you. I hope you do return, many, many times!

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: November 17, 2005 )

Dearest Lucie
There is only so much one can say and still risk not exposing themselves completely. But Lucie you seem to always "get me" and it makes my heart feel so good. Thank you my dearest friend for stopping here and reading. Love you to pieces.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: November 21, 2005 )

age of torment
clever.

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: December 9, 2005 )

Torment(er)
Nae,

Loved the piece and am trying to catch up after a long absence. I think this works very well for all the reasons given.

"There is only so much one can say and still risk not exposing themselves completely"

I am a great believer that there is only so much you SHOULD say and leave the reader to gain his own feelings, thoughts, emmotions and understanding from it. I also think you are a master (or should that be mistress) at this. However I do not agree with your reasoning that I have quoted above.

At the risk of being called a 'dirty old man' I would say I certainly would risk 'exposing myself completely' also I think you do...extremely well.

I love poetry that deals with self searching, as it is only when we do not think we have all the answers we can be sure we are right!

Have Fun,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: January 15, 2006 )

LMJ & Ivor
Clever is good, thank you!

Ivor, I do expose alot of myself in my writing. I guess not everyone sees it all, but you seem too. It is a precious gift to find comments from you. Thank you my friend.

Nae ;0)

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: January 15, 2006 )





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