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Iron wrought shackles bound my chains,
each link growing stonger because of my pain.
The weight of each drags me down,
obscures my vision and surrounds.

I\'m left in darkness heavy and still,
despair increasing; I\'m losing my will.
Looking around; I\'m left alone,
lost forever to everyone.

I\'m seasrching for but can\'t find,
the one thing that brings peace to mind.
Where did you go; why aren\'t you here,
the only cure to ease my fears.

At the end of a tunnel there is a light,
blinding everything else out of sight.
There you stand waiting for me,
calming my fears and bringing me peace.


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The following comments are for "Savior (part 2)"
by grrlynn

Hi grrlynn
Darkest before the light is what I felt from reading your prose. I like your style.

Well done!

( Posted by: eleda [Member] On: November 14, 2005 )





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