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poor gato had his heart ripped out
by the most beautiful angel
he had ever loved

she smiled and asked
what made him so sad

he was in that place
suspended in the punchline
of the universe's cruelest joke

she rubbed the back of his head
telling him
he could never see her agian

at work he shingled a gable end
and on the back of the last shingle
had wrote the first lines of this poem

but the light is driven too deep in his soul,
it'll take more then a love forever lost

poor gato

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The following comments are for "poor gato"
by IlichVladikov

Well drawn...
... and lightly shaded. I really like the little human touches which save this poem from cliche: the touch to back of his head, the graffiti-ed shingle.
(A few jarring typos, though: 'again' not 'agian', 'he wrote' not 'had wrote', 'than' not 'then'.)

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: November 4, 2005 )

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