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to the most beautiful,
to the most charming,
you make my heart beat so quick,
it's alarming,
when i see you,
i dont know what to say,
i think back to the past,
the choices i have made,
i shouldnt have let you go,
i chose the wrong way,
your eyes, they glow..
looking into them is a miracle,
your smile.. it's like snow,
so beautiful and bright,
you never want it to go.
you lit up my life,
and made it right, what have i done?
i didnt even put up a fight,
i miss you and love you,
what else can i say..if i could change the past,that would make my day




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The following comments are for "To Kay"
by skrill

Nice little poem...
...but, it could have had more emotion (I know it's an emotional poem, but, I kinda felt it was flat,
2-dimensional), the potential is there...

--jasmine

( Posted by: Jasmine [Member] On: August 14, 2002 )

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i'm sure if someone had the chance jessica, they would have ;) thank you both for the feedback it is good to hear what people think ;) i did not write it as poetry but as my feelings carefuly worded ;) thanks again i always like to hear what people think.

( Posted by: skrill [Member] On: August 14, 2002 )

Rythm
I don't know alot about poetry, but I think this one has a nice rythm to it.

( Posted by: kross [Member] On: August 14, 2002 )





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