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A single line drawn

Shouldnt be so sublime

Dont stop

Tracing that thin line

Between pleasure and extacy

Stiffle the sounds

Of her unquenchable thirst

Two hearts that pound

To one solid beat

misery is so beautiful

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The following comments are for "Line"
by ambellina

Lightly Drawn
ambellina ~ I like the haiku quality of this poem. It's simple yet evocative and borders on the lush in just a few lines ~ nicely done.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: November 5, 2005 )

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