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Helen was a joy to know teaching me to grow she called me sweetheart her gentle voice to never part we use to have tea just her and me to my heart she held a special key I miss her so much her gentle touch she brought so much love she was a gift from above


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by Elmer

structure
you might want to think about presentation
and experiment a little
the following was just an idea:

Helen was a joy
to know
teaching me to grow
she called me
sweetheart

her gentle voice
to never part
we used to have tea
just her and me
to my heart she held
a special key

I miss her so much
her gentle touch
she brought so much
love

she was a gift
from above

( Posted by: huntingjonathon [Member] On: November 1, 2005 )





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