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what would the sun do if it could talk or walk or jump or sit on a stump or sing about a ring or eat a grape or a tape or even a car or sit at a bar, or drink maybe sink to the bottom of a pool or go to a school, maybe he would fly or at least try to do something fun and run as fast as he could or would to do something good.. at least he should but what would it do if it lost it's shoe maybe it would cry or try to find some more or slam the door from being mad or even sad or he could smile or have a child that would most likely be wild or weird i doubt it could grow a beard from the heat that would be neat if it really had feet. what a weird thought.




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The following comments are for "A Thought"
by skrill

what a ride
Now that will twist your noodle! Nice job.

( Posted by: kross [Member] On: August 12, 2002 )

Erm...sh-yeah!
This was an ecxellent ramble!

I did find the switch between 'he' and 'it' a little off putting, there seemed to be no logic to that, butthen again, this isn't about logic, right?!

--jasmine

( Posted by: Jasmine [Member] On: August 13, 2002 )

Impressed
I'm impressed. Very, actually. You should post more of your poems.

( Posted by: Chrispian [Admin] On: August 13, 2002 )

Just a thought
This is very interesting. I think if you hooked up with an artist you may be able to turn it into a piece of children's lit. It's very Dr. Seuss like.

I mean that as a compliment.:)

Richard

( Posted by: Richard Dani [Member] On: August 14, 2002 )

smile
hi,

smile because it make`s my day. I think it is very cheerful.
Sometime`s I sit here, and ask myself those ` if ` questions (the weirdest thing)

I like it

go for it!

( Posted by: puck [Member] On: August 16, 2002 )





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