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I've wrote this over like 500 times to describe my feelings I had for you.

K. here it goes, We had the same home room, you sat 2 seats down, we started to get to know eachother, then we started hanging out. When I said I liked you I found out you liked someone else. That started the crack deep down.

The deep wound still there, I seemed to shrug it off. Then you wrote me this note...your almost girlfriend found out and got mad at you. I realized you were just playin me, I got pissed I was raged.

A suicidal wave came over me, I just wanted to die, I carved your name in my wrist so the world would realize that I didn't die of a suicidal way, but of a broken heart, then I started thinking I want to live to prove that I am strong, then maybe you would realize your names on my arm for a reason, you were a really big jerk and what you did really hurt.

I'll always remember your name carved away in my arm and there your name will stay engraved even if not seen to say you ripped my heart out and threw it away just to show your carless ways.



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by DeMoNiCcHiLd

Wow. What exactly is this?

( Posted by: AGlassThought [Member] On: November 7, 2005 )

a short story out or my life about some guy.

( Posted by: DeMoNiCcHiLd [Member] On: November 9, 2005 )

yo this is kewl I like it neways but who is it about? Oh and no guy is worth gettin suicidal over remember that...see u at skool


( Posted by: twistymisty [Member] On: January 14, 2006 )

ya i know that is why i snapped out of it

( Posted by: DeMoNiCcHiLd [Member] On: January 14, 2006 )

Sorry to be rude...
Sorry to be rude, but I hope this sorry excuse for a story dies a horrble death. This suicidal emo excuse for a story has many major flaws in the few words that creates it.

1. No kid your age should or can feel that strongly about some boy.

2. Learn to use periods, don't make a whole new paragraph.

3. This hardly qualifies as a story, it's more of a suicidal love note.

4. Try to be more descriptive and differ from the simple list of words you know.

Now with that said, you will need to learn to take harsh critisim. I don't expect you to listen to me and I will more than likely get pointless rude messages from you.

( Posted by: Rejected [Member] On: April 7, 2006 )

Yeah im sorry if this isn't the style that you like but i wrote it and yes i can take harsh critisism thank for your opinion and im not meaning to be rude but your kind of an asshole for judging me before you even know me thinking im just goin to lash out at you for having an opinion on my poetry if i didn't want harsh critisism then i wouldn't put my art on here thank you very much

( Posted by: DeMoNiCcHiLd [Member] On: April 9, 2006 )

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