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Bright lit pumpkins
Withches glare
Something spooky
In the air

Little kids
Run to and fro
Weary parents
Start to slow

Treats and tricks
For all to snag
Wagons,Parents
Full of Bags

Homemade costumes
Store bought too
Demons,Monsters
Giant Shoe?

Then you're older
And you see
Its just not what it
Used to be.

Costumes seem
So dull and boring
Sorting candy
Leaves you snoring.

So finally
You've reached the place
Where Halloween
Is in last place.



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The following comments are for "Halloweens Past"
by Flamingolover

Halloween
Flamingolover, this was a fun read, took me back to the things we used to read in school. Thank you. The only line that I think needs a little work is the last.

"Is in last place. "

Maybe something like:

Has lost it's place?

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: October 28, 2005 )

Never!!!!
I still get excited every Halloween -- decorating begins in September! I've known many people with the attitude you write of, though, and they sadden me.

Nicely done, though, and I agree with Nae about the last line.

Here's my Halloween poem: http://www.lit.org/view/7741

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: October 28, 2005 )

Halloweens Past

Hi
This is a cute poem . I enjoyed where you picked the reader up and set him down at the end of the ride. I love Halloween. Changes? I'm a surreal writer but I longed to edit your first paragraph to make it more punchy.

Was:

Bright lit pumpkins
Withches glare
Something spooky
In the air
..................................
Maybe to :

Pumpkins pump light
Witches stare
Spooky things fly
By the air

I hope you enjoyed reading my comment. Thank you for your poem.
Cleveland W. Gibson
author of Moondust
www.LauraHird.com see showcase


( Posted by: Cleveland W. Gibson [Member] On: October 28, 2005 )





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