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I am from sadness
And things gone wrong
Pain and abuse
Have been my song

I am from dysfunction
And misplaced roles
No solace at home
And no future goals

I am from a sister
Who cries at night
Teased by peers
Who think itís all right

I am from Mommy
Who lies in her bed
Do Not Disturb
Or youíll wish you were dead.

I am from Daddy
Whom I loved yet I hated
But his preference for girls
Is much understated.

So now I am from court dates
And staring juries
Rushing social workers
And bottled up furies.

I am from therapy
And sideways glances
And second chances

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The following comments are for "So Now..."
by Flamingolover

minor changes
last line second stanza
remove "and"
last line third stanza
remove "all"

you have a rhyme scheme, you might as well stick to it if you can with just a few minor changes.



( Posted by: huntingjonathon [Member] On: October 29, 2005 )

Nice rhyming peom..
.....keep it up.


( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: October 30, 2005 )

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