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i live in a beautiful neighbourhood
with a giant communal swimming pool
that toddlers fill with gold, not urine.
my Motorola(tm) phone has its own plastic surgeon on speed dial.
the girl next door sunbathes naked on her balcony
and nobody admits to wanting to commit suicide
by jumping into the dark silicon chasm
between her giant breasts
her boyfriend has nineteen inch biceps and drives
a mustang
that has found God on the discovery channel
while the mailman keeps checking his Rolex(tm)
and twice daily we all have appointments with Picasso(tm)
who paints human faces on the blank stumps
we try to pass of as heads
and I'm so fucking rich that if I slit my wrists
I bleed Donald Trump(tm)
(I tend to shy away from referencing popculture
in my poetry,
since it thumbtacks the poem to some moment in
time and space,
but it's good that I do it in this instance,
otherwise I'd have to examine my character.
And we really don't want that).

------
"Imperious, choleric, irascible, extreme in everything, with a dissolute imagination the like of which has never been seen... there you have me in a nutshell, and kill me again or take me as I am, for I shall not change."

From his Last Will & Testament, Marquis de Sade


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The following comments are for "Good Neighbourhood(tm)"
by strangedaze

Mr. Andy's "Neighbourhood"
I used to live there: "Cranbrook Club," Ft. Lauderdale, FLA...Flight attendants instead of children, though. No kids allowed. It was disgusting.

Keep taking your meds...
B7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 27, 2005 )

Droooo
Sorry my messenger was operating independently of me this evening. We should, indeed, chat.

This is every inch as good as it should be from you. I'm glad I read it. Vivid!!

lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: October 28, 2005 )

ya know
I liked the top half quite a bit,but do people ever admit when they don't understand something?

Things i don't understand
[1] What does tm stand for?
[2] What popculture did you reference?

Liked the picasso line quite a bit.

( Posted by: greatsmile [Member] On: October 30, 2005 )

brilliant
This is really a great poem. I loved the references and especially loved the input of (tm). At first I thought you were covering yourself with the Motorola reference, but then I got it.

The only part I could have done without is the parenthetical portion at the end. I don't know if that's actually part of the poem or your own explanation, but this piece stands alone and doesn't need it one bit.

Good work.

amie

( Posted by: amie [Member] On: November 11, 2005 )





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