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Television Time Remaining
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Iím writing
just trying
to get by
Otherwise surviving
biding my time
Awaiting the day that I die

Striving for Nothing
it lasts forever
though I search for other possibilities
the tied too tight to undo scenes
are too tainted
to be repainted
I know better
than to ever listen to the lies
cause whenever
The struggle
overcomes the rebutle
it's time to buy more time
cause there is nothing left in our lives


lamemansterms






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If a poet ruled the world......what a pleasant place it would be!
~L.T


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The following comments are for "Television Time Remaining"
by LamemansTerms

LMT/"Paying" for your "time"?
LMT- Was "Buying" a Freudian slip?..Or was your reference to Karma?...Probably: "Biding" was word you were looking for..?

I assume you wished to type "remaining," in final line..

"Striving for nothing"....Sorry to hear that.


Transcending mundane material madness,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 27, 2005 )

bobby bad news
man again the bearer of bad news -I promise a good one may come soon.....at least within the next 10..I think you are a little rough with your judgement here but if thst's how you feel then thsts how you feel.**Transcending mundane material madness,

?LT?

( Posted by: LamemansTerms [Member] On: October 28, 2005 )

LMT/ Pay-Per-View
I see you've corrected spelling of "remaining," but "Buying" was intended...Pay-as-you-go...

To answer your question: It's mission, as in 'striving for SOMETHING.'

B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 28, 2005 )

bobby
are you saying that I should make remaining --buying---if so YES I AGREE, that is better.. You are funny man I really sometimes can not decipher what you are getting at. You are really very intelligent or just crazy...then again sometimes people are so smart they are crazy. Thanks for your help. I will change it...stop me if this was not what you were talking about
LT

( Posted by: lamemansterms [Member] On: October 28, 2005 )

Paying dues..
Reference was to "Buying" in S1. If 'Buying' is used in final line, then a change to perhaps: "Paying," would work in S1. That way, you don't repeat. (Words, at least)...

B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 28, 2005 )

bobby
hey yes I gotcha there about the s1 --btw when you said striving for nothing Im sorry--why sorry it happebns to everybody-sometimes people put all their efforts into accomplishing something and it is just to fall unsucessfull....and that sucks but no need to say sorry to me...It sucks and I know it...but please..

( Posted by: lamemansterms [Member] On: October 28, 2005 )





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