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7G.S.VASUKUMAR
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my dear jane
tis a year since you go!
whats keeping you there?

if you could sense,
the pain i`m feeling,
you would have come !

cant explain,
all lonely nights
i spend without you.

but i`m sure
a day will come
and together we SHALL BE.
I MISS YOU



------
csam


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The following comments are for "i miss you"
by chriss

chriss/ "Work harder"
..I reference your 'motto' at bio. I suggest doing just that, regarding your poetry.

This piece lacks originality/creativity. Would be fine on postcard to "Jane," or inside a card.

Keep working at craft.

Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 20, 2005 )

chriss
yes I agree with Robert..I guess this piece better works as a message ...you could work on it again and fix the mistake..it could turn out to be poetic one

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: October 22, 2005 )

Its not bad..
...as Bobby and Fairgrace feel about it. Yes, It could be improved.

Bye,

GSVK

( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: October 23, 2005 )





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