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I saw Death—Playing—
She was Running through the woods
Like a feral Horse—Neighing—
Ignoring the world of shoulds—

And I—for my Part—
Enjoyed watching her Game—
Until—It reached my Heart—
And to the List of death—my Name

Was added—in Ink—
And Death did send
Me—with a Wink—
To my beginning’s end—


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The following comments are for "I Saw Death--Playing-- (an Emily Dickenson imitation)"
by Persephone

Death...
... 'like a feral horse'. Great image. It'll stay with me, that one. Thanks.

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: October 21, 2005 )

"I saw DEATH - Playing"
Persephone- I liked use of "feral," as well.

You may have overdone caps a bit. See: "Time and Eternity."...I'd only cap: "DEATH," in piece this short. Was reference enough for me.



Enjoyed read,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 21, 2005 )

Death..
Nice work, Persephone.

GSVK

( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: October 23, 2005 )

around the corner

"Running through the woods". Obscure imagery...you never know when death is right around the corner.

Liked it much,

macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: October 27, 2005 )





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