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Passing by

Fast flowing water.
A spash and a gush,
Washing against the skin,
like sharp scrubs searching,
For a broken bone inside me,
For deep wounds,
and for deeper scars.
But there is nothing.
No. There is something.
Something no water,
no scrub can reach.
Nor something that can be seen.
Only felt.
Yet not everyone can feel it.
Only one. Only me.
No antidote can cure it.
No drug can take me away from it.
Nothing can make me feel differently.
No poison will kill it,
Just one thing, something we all take.
This feeling will fade over time,
But time will also take me,
So where do i go,
When time sees me at every exit.
So where do i run,
when I can not escape.
i can not run. I can only take time.
And let time take me.

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The following comments are for "Passing by"
by namelessdragoon

I meant to type Splash, not spash. haha that sounds funny :D

( Posted by: namelessdragoon [Member] On: October 16, 2005 )

Passing by.
Namelessdragon, this was nice one. I liked it. I was searching for that word..and didn't find it. Anyway, keep posting.


( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: October 16, 2005 )

Thanks GSVK, ill keep posting once i get the time to write some more.

( Posted by: namelessdragoon [Member] On: October 17, 2005 )

I love it. It was very descriptive. As I was reading it, I was imagining the words(the splashing and gushing of water)and you hit the nail right on the head when you spoke of not being able to see time or run from it, but feel it. That was deep. Excellent piece. Can't wait to read more.

( Posted by: Windsong [Member] On: October 17, 2005 )

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