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As I drift in solitude and prayers

My mind and soul finds peace

Only moments, yet so divine

As I let the waters cradle me

I dream of my secret garden

Filled with love and the spring of life

In this place I visit past, present and future

Seeking knowledge to be understood

These waters of peace I let carry me

Taken away in its vastness and beauty

To the answers not ready to be known

I am content with my faith

I must have slipped into the peace

Awakend by life nibbling at my toes

I opened my eyes to a glorious site

Above my bliss an eagle flew past

His morning hunt and my wake up call

As I tread, I see no familiar site

Oh me, time to come down to earth

Time to plant my feet firmly on solid ground

Up stream, yet, currents gentle

I swam a mile or so, a time to analize

My thoughts so many, so very many


My last swim of the year
But, what an eye opening experience
Faith plus peace add hope and time will heal....


Robinbird




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The following comments are for "Faith, Peace and Hope..."
by Robinbird

Robin
Hey you,

What a beauty you've created. I like the new/young/spring use here. It's always tricky to use nature images, but sometimes they are the appropriate avenues. You really wrote a gem here. This is my favourite of yours yet - but I haven't read 'today's' other submission yet. One typo that I caught: analyze.

I also like the line spacing and the change-up at the end. Nice write!

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: October 10, 2005 )

Faith, Peace, and Hope
Robin;
Very humble words here..There is nothing like Faith, Hope, and Peace!... Our faith lays hold on the Lord, We shall see this in manifestation. I love this, very beautiful words. "Peace Be Still"


Blessings,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: October 10, 2005 )

Robin to GG...
I wrote this last night, times have and are trying for me now...

I was thinking about a swim, my last swim of the season...we have had a cool spell...

That swim was as I described, I was at peace, and I fell asleep just floating down the river
and the minnows were biting my toes, just as I opened my eyes a male bald eagle flew right above me, (TVA had recently relocated 50
pair of eagles,) I have only seen 1 other eagle in the wild...it was a glorious site.

I'm pleased with this write, I would say this is my favorite as well...(sorry 'bout spelling, gettin' better)

Thank you Lans...Peace be with you, too.
Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: October 10, 2005 )

Peace Be Still...
Thanks from the heart, you are on spot with so many of your thoughts, you have been more than helpful for me, you have been heartful for me...

Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: October 10, 2005 )

Just Great!
I really loved this one. Hats off to you for writing such a wonderful poem. I wish I could give more than 10 ( rating ) unfotunately, That's the limit, right ? I wish to read more of ur poems soon.

Take care and keep posting...

Bye,

GSVK

( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: October 13, 2005 )

GSVK
Thank You...For the great comment, this peice of worke just hatched...my better writings come about that way...I'll check you out as well.

Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: October 13, 2005 )

I believe...
the eagle flying over you is God's way of telling you ....He's watching over you...Jump into the river and God will lift you up...He will always be there to care for you...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: November 1, 2005 )

Kacee...
Thanks Kacee, I like very much, that thought,
God is watching over me...your interpretation is uplifting...love to you, and God Bless...

Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: November 1, 2005 )

Very nice
I realllly enjoy your structure and use of words...


Taken away in its vastness and beauty
To the answers not ready to be known

Beautiful line here, really enjoy the insight

As I drift in solitude and prayers

My mind and soul finds peace
Only moments, yet so divine
As I let the waters cradle me
I dream of my secret garden
Filled with love and the spring of life

Def. the best lines in my opinion. Great imagery and use of words, emotive too.

I enjoy many of works, looking forward to more

( Posted by: Essence [Member] On: November 25, 2005 )





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