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god's upset today, he only went in to drop off a tape,
bought a java, cake, proceeded to the space,
he only paused for a lifetime,
looked at his ride inside those white lines,
thinking it looked even worse in sunshine.

an off white rusty heap of dented panels,
welded like a button flannel shirt, with a striped skirt,
but still nice to handle.

driving through milky way,
he spots a stray lapping spilt milk off the gutter
reminding him of his drinking days.

and the collar reads earth,
but no contact or address, just a skinny cat
on a long street where nothing happens.


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The following comments are for "god's parking ticket"
by IlichVladikov

Just a skinny cat, huh?
Killer last line in this one!
I wasn't sure about the poem as a whole, really... it seemed to meander rather (what had the parking ticket to do with anything, by the way?) but I don't half love that closing image. Kudos, IlichVladikov.

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: October 11, 2005 )





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